"Hey kid!" I looked up, and noticed two hunters approaching me.
"C-can I help you?" I squeaked, attempting to look scared. They usually leave you alone sooner that way.
"Well... I'm afraid we're in need of some extra funding." the first said. "And you can help. We'll just be taking your suitcase, and taking what we need, then returning the rest."
A robbery. Just what I needed. First day attempting to start anew in a civilized area and already getting mugged by the government. "I... This is all I have... Please sirs..."
They grabbed my suitcase, tearing it open. I smiled. The perks of the great outdoors... "You can drop everything right now." I said darkly, twisting my hands into a simple casting stance. "And that does include compensation for your troubling me.
One turned. My smile turned into a feral grin. "Vengeance for my fallen friends, hunters. Nothing personal."
His gun came out of the holster, and his arm stopped suddenly. "What the-"
"Shado-" the second fell silent as I cast my second favorite spell, binding him with his own shadow.
"Hush..." I said in the most derogatory voice my angered self could manage. "I just need a bit of metal. Your guns will do nicely." Taking their weapons, I gave their ranks a glance. "Fresh out of the academy, eh?" I put the barrels to their heads. "Pity. I suppose that explains your inexperienced attempts though." The fear in their eyes was disturbingly refreshing. "Best nobody knows this ever happened." I sent a burst of electricity through the guns, effectively knocking them both unconscious. They wouldn't remember this night well. If I was correct, they would only remember a vague bit about a magician almost killing them, and likely quit their jobs hunting my kind and move on. It will suffice. I thought as I collected my bag and moved on into the station. The time for me to show the enemy why the feared the dark was near.
Wow! This one went into a really cool direction. Like all your freewrites, one has to pay attention to the detail to avoid getting lost. A bit hard to introduce a reader to your secondary world of great and epic proportions in 15 minutes, eh? But you always do that masterfully, giving just enough detail to keep us on track so long as we don't speed read.
ReplyDeleteIt works out great how you begin with introducing your character, a very adept and well-prepared fellow. Well prepared for the majority of what could come his way. And with a past. A painful past. One which continues to pursue him into the present, as he continued pursuing whatever it was he hoped to accomplish. And nice way of sliding in his sketchy morals there, with the comment about the young man /deserving/ to be stollen from... because he was part of /their/ society. Mysterious and thrilling!
Then the confrontation. xD That's my favorite part. Especially their line, "Well... I'm afraid we're in need of some extra funding." the first said. "And you can help. We'll just be taking your suitcase, and taking what we need, then returning the rest." Hah! That's just sooo blatant and.... xD That's epic. As is his annoyed mental comment, "First day attempting to start anew in a civilized area and already getting mugged by the government." Painful accuracy there! And humorous as well. Really, this character comes across as older. Like, upper twenties at least. Not even as a young man who would still be called a "kid". Especially when he takes them out like a seasoned assassin... not that he's an assassin, but you know, with that skill. Great freewrite!
Oh, and formatting got a bit messed up there. This has happened before, with a post of Addi's, I think. Either of you have any clue why that happened?
ReplyDeletethanks! :D trying to make a new type of character for another story I've been thinking of (for after Demon Within).
ReplyDeleteAnd I have no clue... it's odd...
Cool!!!
ReplyDeleteYeah... strange... did you copy and paste into here?